What did you learn?
I learned how to make and interview into a high quality product by adding an introduction, and accually making the interview into a story rather than just an interview.
How did you learn in?
i've learned that the critiques helped me improve my writing skills and seeing how my worked improved.
Why is this important?
i think that critiques helped me improvem my work and its helpful for me because it make sme have a better final product and it will make my work make more sense and have a better understandign of the work.
Monday, June 1, 2009
Tuesday, May 26, 2009
Magazine Reflection Take Two!
1. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what improved? How did it get better? Why?
what i improved on is my writing. People helped me critiqued my paper and they helped me how to structure my writing and they helped me get better vocabulary for words that could of been replaced. The structure changed because people helped me have many topics towards the questions and they made me separate main topics from the interview questions. I made my interview more into a story rather than just a boring interview.
2. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why?
What i think needs more work is basically adding more to the interview. I think t be good to add more information to the interview because i think it be better for the reader to get even more information on the place and about the people that worked there.
3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.
I think that paths i took were just getting my work critiqued and improving it. i had many interviews around 6 and they were all critiqued diffrently an dthey helped me realize the diffrent mistakes that i made and how i could be able to improve it.
4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.
I think that critiquing helped me better my work and it helped me realize that i could fix my work and it can better and i can be able to make it better by thinking outside the box.
what i improved on is my writing. People helped me critiqued my paper and they helped me how to structure my writing and they helped me get better vocabulary for words that could of been replaced. The structure changed because people helped me have many topics towards the questions and they made me separate main topics from the interview questions. I made my interview more into a story rather than just a boring interview.
2. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why?
What i think needs more work is basically adding more to the interview. I think t be good to add more information to the interview because i think it be better for the reader to get even more information on the place and about the people that worked there.
3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.
I think that paths i took were just getting my work critiqued and improving it. i had many interviews around 6 and they were all critiqued diffrently an dthey helped me realize the diffrent mistakes that i made and how i could be able to improve it.
4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.
I think that critiquing helped me better my work and it helped me realize that i could fix my work and it can better and i can be able to make it better by thinking outside the box.
Monday, May 18, 2009
Magazine Reflection: the beginning
1. What went well for you during the process of creating this magazine?
What went good through out the process is the fact that i was able to get my paper critiqued by many people and they gave me great feedback because I'm not the best writer and getting my paper critiqued made my paper get better and more professional.
2. What challenges did you face as you moved from an early draft or idea to a final product?
A challenge i over came was when my computer shut down 3 times and i never had the time to save it. i over came it by plugging in my computer and going to a quite place where i got to do my work. i also saved my work every time i did a change.
3. What other examples of work—student and professional—stood out as exemplary and served as a good model for your own work?
I really didn't have a lot of work to look at bacause i was working on mine that whole time, so i basically did mine on my own. I also let Vanessa (my editor), work on my article that way they all looked alike but at the same time look different.
What went good through out the process is the fact that i was able to get my paper critiqued by many people and they gave me great feedback because I'm not the best writer and getting my paper critiqued made my paper get better and more professional.
2. What challenges did you face as you moved from an early draft or idea to a final product?
A challenge i over came was when my computer shut down 3 times and i never had the time to save it. i over came it by plugging in my computer and going to a quite place where i got to do my work. i also saved my work every time i did a change.
3. What other examples of work—student and professional—stood out as exemplary and served as a good model for your own work?
I really didn't have a lot of work to look at bacause i was working on mine that whole time, so i basically did mine on my own. I also let Vanessa (my editor), work on my article that way they all looked alike but at the same time look different.
Tuesday, April 21, 2009
Literature group reflection...
What was your book about?
The book i read was "The Great Gatsby", its about a guy named Nick Carraway that lived in New York City. With a neighbor called Jay Gatsby. Gatsby wanted to win Daisy Buchanan's heart, she is married to a man called Tom Buchanan, but his past in in between the love of both him and her. the only way that he could get close to her is making parties and inviting his neighbor Nick Daisy's cousin. Daisy rejected Gatsby. Tom and Gatsby confronted each other in the Plaza Hotel.Gatsby a the end committed murder.
What worked?
What worked is the game that i did at the last minute game my group and i came up with rules and how it would work. The game was great we finished it and we enjoyed it.
What didn't work?
m no able to finish the book in time and have a hard time understanding what in reading.
The book i read was "The Great Gatsby", its about a guy named Nick Carraway that lived in New York City. With a neighbor called Jay Gatsby. Gatsby wanted to win Daisy Buchanan's heart, she is married to a man called Tom Buchanan, but his past in in between the love of both him and her. the only way that he could get close to her is making parties and inviting his neighbor Nick Daisy's cousin. Daisy rejected Gatsby. Tom and Gatsby confronted each other in the Plaza Hotel.Gatsby a the end committed murder.
What worked?
What worked is the game that i did at the last minute game my group and i came up with rules and how it would work. The game was great we finished it and we enjoyed it.
What didn't work?
m no able to finish the book in time and have a hard time understanding what in reading.
Obama Socialism
what did you find?
When the words "Obama Socialism", all that came up was Obama's Ageanda on socialism. The republican party mislabeled from socialism for a republican leader.The republican party said that Obama would cause the economic downfall of our nation by painting his beliefs to all that voters that way Obama get more votes.
Do you feel that the label "socialism" is applied appropriately or correctly to Obama, his proposals or his policies?
In the article I found it says that yes what Obama wants to try has actually been tried before by past politicians. A part of the article that talks about previous issues of this states
Do Obama's proposals or policies have historic precedents in America? If so, what happened in the past?
As I went on to read the article it started connecting the past events to Obama's current day plans and it states that the word fascism can't be applied because he is not a fascist, he's a liberal.
When the words "Obama Socialism", all that came up was Obama's Ageanda on socialism. The republican party mislabeled from socialism for a republican leader.The republican party said that Obama would cause the economic downfall of our nation by painting his beliefs to all that voters that way Obama get more votes.
Do you feel that the label "socialism" is applied appropriately or correctly to Obama, his proposals or his policies?
In the article I found it says that yes what Obama wants to try has actually been tried before by past politicians. A part of the article that talks about previous issues of this states
Do Obama's proposals or policies have historic precedents in America? If so, what happened in the past?
As I went on to read the article it started connecting the past events to Obama's current day plans and it states that the word fascism can't be applied because he is not a fascist, he's a liberal.
Wednesday, March 25, 2009
Photo Essay
The day at the Eco-center, located in City Heights, starts off in the auditorium after the bus driver drives them to the Eco-center, were kids get to see a video on what alternative fuels and renewable fuels are. They get to find out were they come from, and which ones are good and which ones are bad for our environment. The kids then get a clipboard were they get a sheet they need to fill out through out the tour. Here in the picture you have one of my fellow classmates that also was an intern, Jasmine Bell, where underneath the kids are paying attention to our mentor, Candace McGovern, were she explains that petroleum come from dinosaurs and ethanol comes from corn. Then they fill out the questions on the biggest invention in the 20’s century, the car. Then they get an idea of the whole tour.
The second station you have an inflatable maze were kids get asked in how a car is made up, with a fuel and an engine, here kids get different engines with proper fuels. The activity that the kids do is that they get their fuels and they get to rate the fuel on pollution and if it’s a renewable gas. The fuels and engines are in pouches, where kids have to find in the maze. The kids get only seconds to find the engines that are in green pouches, they come back to sit down then they find out their fuels, then they have to go back to look for their fuels on black pouches. Kids then put the pouches under a black light were the fuels are given a grade, then they write the answers in their work sheets. The highest that was graded was for the hydrogen fuel with A+ pollution and A+ renewable, the same with food for human power. The lowest grade was a F for gasoline for both renewable and pollution. The fuels get grades that way, kids get and idea which fuels are good and some are bad. 
This is the third station kids get to watch a movie on how electricity is made where you have 2 hydrogen’s on one side and oxygen on the other. The 2 hydrogen’s want to go to the oxygen and they are held apart by a membrane, in order for the hydrogen’s to go to the oxygen’s they go under the membrane, and then loses its electrons were they are left on the other side and they go around to meet the hydrogen which produces electricity. Then they watch a video on how hybrid car works with and actual model of a toy hybrid car running on water and electricity. In this picture you have 2 kids volunteer on demonstrating how a hybrid car would run. You have 2 cars a hybrids and a normal gasoline tank car, they both are given an amount of 12 fake dollars and they are tested of both running their magnet cars the amount a car runs in an average gallon, a gas tank runs about 20 miles per gallon, a hybrid runs 40 miles, they are tested to run 80 miles and at the end the tank gas has not money left after the 80 miles and the hybrid has 6 dollars and has enough to get home. 
The forth part of the tour the kids get to find out how many people contain 6 countries, The United States, Mexico, Brazil, United Europe, South Africa, and China. They find out the population and the amount of cars they have. They get o find out how much fossil fuels they use, also were you can find solar panels and wind turbines, and what they are for. They find out were are the 10 top places were oil is found and its basically in the middles east, and since we use some they ask the how they get it over here and they say the oil tanker.
The fifth station is were kids get to email the governor on reducing fossil fuels, also learning on solar panels and wind turbines, then they learn on watts and renewable fuels. At each station kids get to answer questions that are in each station. In this picture you have Jasmine Bell and she is helping kids on how the solar drawbridge works, this solar drawbridge is made out of Legos so its not the greatest, when you turn on the light bulb kids get to see how it works. In this section the kids are asked “what do you feel when you put your hand under the light?” the kids would say “heat!”, then they are ask “what happens to the solar drawbridge when the solar panel is covered?” they say “it stops working.” and they write their answer on their sheet.
Magazine
1. What article(s) would you like to write for the magazine? What photography could you contribute? Art? List three different ideas for your major contribution.
-Art- i like being able to show the art that i like to do, i think that i could be able to do some art on my internship.
-Photography- i like taking pictures and be able to take them of different angles.
-Trascript- i think that i was able to re-arrange the transcript so it could sound fluent.
2. Suggest at least one (or more) possible title for the magazine. This could be a title with or without a subtitle. For example, I work for UnBoxed: a Journal of Adult Learning in Schools.
The day at the Eco-center: Kids learn about having a clean and better future.
3. Suggest a topic for an article that you were personally like to read in a magazine inspired by the internship semester.
How to make your boring intership fun.
How to not be bored at internship.
-Art- i like being able to show the art that i like to do, i think that i could be able to do some art on my internship.
-Photography- i like taking pictures and be able to take them of different angles.
-Trascript- i think that i was able to re-arrange the transcript so it could sound fluent.
2. Suggest at least one (or more) possible title for the magazine. This could be a title with or without a subtitle. For example, I work for UnBoxed: a Journal of Adult Learning in Schools.
The day at the Eco-center: Kids learn about having a clean and better future.
3. Suggest a topic for an article that you were personally like to read in a magazine inspired by the internship semester.
How to make your boring intership fun.
How to not be bored at internship.
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